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Re:Need feedback Carpe Herri / Diem story 3 Years, 11 Months ago Karma: 1  
I think we all get it. You like to jack off to crappy stories. Perhaps you should consider a hobby?
 
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Re:Need feedback Carpe Herri / Diem story 3 Years, 11 Months ago Karma: 7  
Yeah, seriously it was specificaly asked "I am looking for constructive criticism". Let people do so without feeling the need to tell us you don't consider such stories worthy of it.
 
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Re:Need feedback Carpe Herri / Diem story 3 Years, 11 Months ago Karma: -10  
lilbabyboy wrote:
I need my porn directed by Martin Scorcese!!

Oh, so you're into that kinda thing.
 
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Re:Need feedback Carpe Herri / Diem story 3 Years, 11 Months ago Karma: 0  
vended wrote:
Yeah, seriously it was specificaly asked "I am looking for constructive criticism". Let people do so without feeling the need to tell us you don't consider such stories worthy of it.

Not saying that lilbabyboy's feedback ("I'm just here to fap!") is particularly constructive, but the opener ("Your story sucks so much I assume you're 12") didn't exactly set the bar very high...
 
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Thanks so far 3 Years, 11 Months ago Karma: 2  
Thanks for the feed back. It is not a short story, there is a lot more. So all the notes about the not fleshedoutedness are spot on. Thanks everyone for taking the time. What I have put up so far is just part of the first act. Ill post more, and at some point when I am further in the story consider a formal narrator.

If you are into hardcore stuff this is not your story. Not sure how much sex will be in the story but I am making it up as I go. Fetishy, but not so much about dripping cocks and fucking every 3d page.

but like I said i like hearing what works for all of you. thank you.

Still working on it, still shaping it. Means a lot that you bothered.

*curtsy*

 
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Re:Thanks so far 3 Years, 11 Months ago Karma: 7  
You're welcome.

Just try posting reviews on your favorite works as much as you want them for your own. :]
 
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